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The diagram explains the process of building a type of tent called a tepee.

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The diagram explains the process of building a type of tent called a tepee. Overall, the diagram shows how to build a tent through eight most essential stages, starting with wrap a rope around three sticks and end by using a heavy pin to fix the tent to the ground. First of all, the process begins with a tripod, which is created by using a rope to clinch three sticks together. Then, other bars that have the same size are elevated to the tripod to form an enormous tripod. Next, pulling the rope to fasten the tripod, ensure it is stable afterward. The fifth stage of the process is that finding a big cloth, such as a canvas, to surround the tripod to make a layer around the hut. In the next stage, you will need a metal pins which are used to reattach the canvas. In the end, the tepee needs to be fixed onto the ground by using a stack and a rope. Now the tent is finished and ready to use.
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the process of building a type of
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tent
called a tepee.

Overall
, the diagram
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shows
how to build a
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tent
through eight most essential stages, starting with wrap a
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rope
around three sticks and
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end
by using a heavy pin to
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fix
the
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tent
to the ground.

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First of all
, the process
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begins
with a tripod, which
is created
by using a
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rope
to clinch three sticks together. Then, other bars that have the same size
are elevated
to the tripod to form an enormous tripod.
Next
, pulling the
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rope
to fasten the tripod, ensure it is stable afterward.

The fifth stage of the process is that finding a
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big
cloth, such as a canvas, to surround the tripod to
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make
a layer around the hut. In the
next
stage, you will need a metal pins which are
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used
to reattach the canvas. In the
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end
, the tepee needs to be
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fixed
onto the ground by using a stack and a
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rope
.
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Now
the
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tent
is finished
and ready to
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use
.
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IELTS academic The diagram explains the process of building a type of tent called a tepee.

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6.5
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