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The diagram demonstrates the various steps in the life of a honey bee.

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The diagram demonstrates the various steps in the life of a honey bee. Overall, it is also noticeable that there are five stages in the development of honey bees, beginning with eggs and finishing with mature adult insects. First of all, the female adult lays an egg, the female typically lays one or two eggs every three days. Between 9 - 10 days later, each egg hatches and the immature insect, or nymph, appears. During the third stage of the life cycle, the nymph grows in size and sheds its skin three times. The moulting first takes place 5 days after the egg hatches, then 7 days later and again another 9 days later. 30 - 31 days from the start of the cycle, the young adult honey bee emerges from its final moulting step, and only 4 days later, it reaches full maturity.
The diagram demonstrates the various steps in the life of a honey bee.
Overall
, it is
also
noticeable that there are five stages in the development of honey bees, beginning with eggs and finishing with mature adult insects.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the female adult lays an egg, the female
typically
lays one or two eggs every three days. Between
Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.
9 - 10
days
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
later
, each egg hatches and the immature insect, or nymph, appears.

During the third stage of the life cycle, the nymph grows in size and sheds its skin three times. The
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moulting
first
takes place 5 days after the egg hatches, then 7 days
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later
and again another 9 days
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
later
.
Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.
30 - 31
days from the
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start
of the cycle, the young adult honey bee emerges from its final
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moulting
step, and
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only
4 days
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
later
, it reaches full maturity.

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