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Men and women fitness membership between 1970 and 2000

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The graph illustrates data about the number of different genders' fitness membership between 1970 and 2000. Overall, what stands out from the chart is that there was wild fluctuations in the rate of female fitness membership during this period. Another interesting point is that the men fitness membership saw a gradually decrease year after year. Turning to the details, the figure of women started at just 1000 in 1970, and it experienced a period of erratic behaviour till 2000 finishing at just 2000. If we look at men it started at 2000 in the beginning of this period, which was the highest percentage at this point. After that it saw a dramatical jump and went up sharply to around 4000. However after that it started plunging and fluctuating, finishing at 3000 in 2000. By contrast, we can say that both figures didn't go at any direction cause there were only fluctuations during this all period.

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 genders' fitness membership between 1970 and 2000.

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gradually decrease
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details
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