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The diagram below shows the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The linear process chart illustrates, the way in which are produce for the building industry. Overall, there are seven stages in the process of making bricks it is the beginning with the digging up of clay and concluding at delivery. During the initial stage clay is excavated out of land with the help of huge digger. Then, the clay is placed onto a metal grid full stop the metal grid is used to sieve  the clay so that aggregates can be separated. After, water and sad are added to the clay to prepare raw material for bricks. In the subsequent stage, there are two process used to make brakes, one is a manual in which molding technique is used and the other one which wire cutting machine is an automatic process. Later on, this raw bricks are dried up in the drying oven for 1to 2 days to remove excess moisture. Then, the bricks are passed on to the kiln for moderate to high temperature followed by a cooling period of 2 to 3 days. The final step involves packing of bricks and transporting them through the trucks to various dealers throughout the country.
The linear
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process
chart illustrates, the way in which are produce for the building industry.
Overall
, there are seven stages in the
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process
of making
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bricks
it is the beginning with the digging up of
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clay
and concluding at delivery.

During the initial stage
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clay
is excavated
out of land with the
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help
of huge digger. Then, the
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clay
is placed
onto a metal grid full
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stop
the metal grid is
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used
to sieve
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the
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clay
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so
that aggregates can
be separated
. After, water and sad are
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added
to the
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clay
to prepare raw material for bricks.

In the subsequent stage, there are two
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process
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used
to
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make
brakes, one is a manual in which molding technique is
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used
and the other one which wire cutting machine is an automatic
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process
. Later on, this raw
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bricks
are dried
up in the drying oven for 1to 2 days to remove excess moisture. Then, the
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bricks
are passed
on to the kiln for moderate to high temperature followed by a cooling period of 2 to 3 days.

The final step involves packing of
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bricks
and transporting them through the trucks to various dealers throughout the country.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

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4 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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