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The bar chart below shows a survey of a group of young professionals aged 20-30 years who were asked to state which factor motivates them to succeed. Summarise the informarion by selecting and rporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The given chart illustrates the information about the different things which are affecting to the young peoples aged 20-30years to have successs in their carrier. As it can be clearly seen form the chart, most of the peole have two common factors which lead them to become successful are Ambiton and Personal satisfsction. Both of the factors are leading the chart with having 80% of votes. However, Family pressure is the second most factor which affects to the younger generation in their journey of becoming a successful person. However, ut has 60%of contribution in the chart. Moreover, with the vote of 60% of factors, Pressure from the society secured 3rd rank in the chart. Furthermore, Rivalry and Desire for material things both are selected by 50% of young professionals as a reason of their successful life. What is more, Peer pressure and money are teo factors choosen by 45% of young job holders. However, 35% of youth thinks that fewling inadequate is also a reason behind the success. More to this, 30% of people thinks that being envy/jealous is also a motivating factor to do something out of the box. And, least number of people think that fear or failure also can be a reason of being successful by selecting only 25% of the young professionals. All in all, personal satisfaction and a proper ambition are two features which lead young professionals to become succeed. However, the generation thinks that having a press of failure is not that affect in their journey of becoming successful person.
The
given
chart
illustrates the information about the
different
things which are affecting to the
young
peoples aged 20-30years to have
successs
in their carrier. As it can be
clearly
seen
form the
chart
, most of the
peole
have two common
factors
which lead them to become
successful
are
Ambiton
and Personal
satisfsction
. Both of the
factors
are leading the
chart
with having 80% of votes.
However
, Family pressure is the second most
factor
which affects to the younger generation in their journey of becoming a
successful
person.
However
,
ut
has 60%of contribution in the
chart
.
Moreover
, with the vote of 60% of
factors
, Pressure from the society secured 3rd rank in the
chart
.
Furthermore
, Rivalry and Desire for material things both
are selected
by 50% of
young
professionals as a reason of their
successful
life.
What is more
, Peer pressure and money are
teo
factors
choosen
by 45% of
young
job holders.
However
, 35% of youth
thinks
that
fewling
inadequate is
also
a reason behind the success. More to this, 30% of
people
thinks
that being envy/jealous is
also
a motivating
factor
to do something out of the box. And,
least
number of
people
think
that fear or failure
also
can be a reason of being
successful
by selecting
only
25% of the
young
professionals. All in all, personal satisfaction and a proper ambition are two features which lead
young
professionals to become succeed.
However
, the generation
thinks
that having a press of failure is not that affect in their journey of becoming
successful
person.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows a survey of a group of young professionals aged 20-30 years who were asked to state which factor motivates them to succeed. Summarise the informarion by selecting and rporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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