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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The below line chart depicts the amount of enquiries that a tourist information has received for a period of six months in 2011. It explains about the three methods and the number of enquiries in each of them. Despite the low quantity of enquiries in the starting period of the year, The in person inquiry increased drastically over the period. Next to this is the inquiries by telephone which has seen a slight dip in period 2 but steadily developed after and remains the second highest. While the number of enquiries of letter or mail was high in the first period accompanied with a steady decline, whereas after the third period the decline has become highly significant. In January the queries which was obtained in person was around 420 which is lower than that of the by letter and by telphone enquiry which was around 780 and 850 respectively. Event though the changes was'nt quite enormous until march on the person or telephone enquire, there was drastic change in them after april at the end of the period the person and telephone enquiry has almost more than doubled than that on march. Although the number of enquiries from letter or mail started high and progressed steadily their numbers declined after march. By the end of june there was a 50 % decline with respect to the numbers in january.
The below line chart depicts the amount of
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enquiries
that
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a tourist information
has received for a
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period
of six months in 2011. It
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explains
about the three methods and the
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number
of
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enquiries
in each of them.

Despite the low quantity of
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enquiries
in the starting
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period
of the year, The in
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person
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inquiry
increased
drastically
over the
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period
.
Next
to this is the inquiries by telephone which has
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seen
a slight dip in
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period
2
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but
steadily
developed after and remains the second highest. While the
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number
of
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enquiries
of letter or mail was high in the
first
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period
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accompanied with
a steady decline, whereas after the third
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period
the decline has become
highly
significant.

In January the queries which
was obtained
in
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person
was around 420 which is lower than that of the by letter and by
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telphone
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enquiry
which was around 780 and 850
respectively
.
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Event
though the
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changes
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was'nt
quite enormous until
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march
on the
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person
or telephone
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enquire
, there was drastic
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change
in them after
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april
at the
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end
of the
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period
the
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person
and telephone
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enquiry
has almost more than doubled than that on
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march
.

Although the
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number
of
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enquiries
from letter or mail
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started
high and progressed
steadily
their
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numbers
declined after
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march
. By the
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end
of
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june
there was a 50 % decline with respect to the
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numbers
in
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january
.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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