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The process diagram illustrates the way in which bricks are produced in the factory.

The process diagram illustrates the way in which bricks are produced in the factory. Overall, comprise seven steps, initiate with excavation of clay form earth and end up with final products packaging and transport. First of all, a elevator dug on earth and collected clay after that it passed through metal grid to collect fine clay, and it convey to other side by the mean of roller or a conveyer. Again the clay mixed up with water and sand in order to enhance the properties of it. Then it went through two processes whether, by die mould made up of metals/wood or through passed through narrow chamber where wire cutter was fixed to cut down clay mixture into several and equal pieces. Afterwards, it had been leavening for 1 to 2 days in drying chamber, to maintain its shape and size. Additionally, it passed from different chambers ranging from heating to cooling. Firstly, it allowed to kept in moderated temperature of 200 to 980 degree calculus. Secondly, it took to high temperature region around 870 to 1300 degree and in order to quenched them they had been keeping on cooling chamber for 2 to 3 days. Finally, after some days they kept out and packaging and delivery to the required place
The process diagram illustrates the way in which bricks
are produced
in the factory.

Overall
, comprise seven steps, initiate with excavation of
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clay
form earth and
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end
up with final products packaging and transport.

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First of all
,
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a
elevator dug on earth and collected
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clay
after that it passed
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through
metal grid to collect fine
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clay
, and it
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convey
to other side by the mean of roller or a
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conveyer
. Again the
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clay
mixed up with water and sand in order to enhance the properties of it.

Then it went
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through
two processes whether, by
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die
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mould
made up of metals/wood or
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through
passed
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through
narrow
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chamber
where wire cutter was
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fixed
to
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cut
down
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clay
mixture into several and equal pieces. Afterwards, it had been leavening for 1 to 2 days in drying
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chamber
, to maintain its shape and size.
Additionally
, it passed from
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different
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chambers
ranging from heating to cooling.
Firstly
, it
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allowed
to
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kept
in moderated temperature of 200 to 980 degree calculus.
Secondly
, it took to high temperature region around 870 to 1300 degree and in order to
The verb after “to” should be in the base form: “quench”.
quenched
them they had been keeping on cooling
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chamber
for 2 to 3 days.
Finally
, after
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some
days they
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kept
out and packaging and delivery to the required place
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IELTS academic The process diagram illustrates the way in which bricks are produced in the factory.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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