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The Diagram Below Shows the Manufacturing Process for Making Sugar

The Diagram Below Shows the Manufacturing Process for Making Sugar VYB7D
The provided diagrams illustrate how sugar is manufactured from sugar cane. Overall, it can be seen that there are seven steps required in the process which begins with growind and ends with cooling. During the process, only one ingredient is used. The first stage in the process is growing sugar cane which takes 12 to 18 months to be mature. Susequently, the sugar cane is harvested either by using sickie or industrial reaper. The process continues with crushing in which the sugar cane is put into a compressor to extract juice. After that, the juice passes through a limestone filter to eleminate all the substance. The purified juice is then boiled in an evaporator so that it condenses and becomes syrup. Susequently, the syrup is stranfered into a centrifuge which rotates in a high speed so that sugar crystal can be separated from it. The process concludes when the sugar is dried and cooled and be ready to be sold in the market.
The provided diagrams illustrate how
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sugar
is manufactured
from
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sugar
cane.

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, it can be
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seen
that there are seven steps required in the
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process
which
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begins
with
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growind
and ends with cooling. During the
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process
,
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only
one ingredient is
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used
.

The
first
stage in the
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process
is growing
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sugar
cane which takes 12 to 18 months to be mature.
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Susequently
, the
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sugar
cane
is harvested
either by using sickie or industrial reaper.

The
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process
continues with crushing in which the
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sugar
cane
is put
into a compressor to extract juice. After that, the juice passes through a limestone filter to
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eleminate
all the substance. The purified juice is then boiled in an evaporator
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so
that it condenses and becomes syrup.
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Susequently
, the syrup is
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stranfered
into a centrifuge which rotates in a high speed
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so
that
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sugar
crystal can
be separated
from it. The
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process
concludes when the
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sugar
is dried
and cooled and be ready to
be sold
in the market.
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IELTS academic The Diagram Below Shows the Manufacturing Process for Making Sugar

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6.0
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