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The diagram below shows the instant noodles I manufactured

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The diagram provides information about how the process to produced the instant noodles. Overall, we can see this procedure consists total seven steps manufacturing before the final product being delivered to market. The operation start with reserved of flour in storage silos and last step was labeling and sealing the cups. Initially, the storage silos reserved by flour trucks. Next, water and oil mix with flour in huge mixture machine. After that, mixture of water, oil and flour passed through rollers as well as went to dough sheets. In dough sheets convert into dough strips. Moreover, machine made circle noodles discs. After that, the noodles discs cooked and dry the noodles. Following that, vegetables and spices added in cups with cooked noodles. Furthermore, the cups transferred for their labeling and packaging. Finally, instant noodles are manufactured. As soon as product is ready to leave the factory, it is shipped to a shepping facility. Then it takes a considerably longer time for product to reach the market
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this procedure consists total seven steps manufacturing
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before
the final product
being delivered
to market. The operation
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start
with reserved of
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flour
in storage silos and last step was labeling and sealing the cups.

Initially
, the storage silos reserved by
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flour
trucks.
Next
, water and oil mix with
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flour
in huge mixture machine. After that, mixture of water, oil and
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flour
passed through rollers
as well
as went to dough sheets. In dough sheets convert into dough strips.
Moreover
, machine made circle
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noodles
discs. After that, the
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noodles
discs cooked and dry the
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noodles
. Following that, vegetables and spices
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added
in cups with cooked
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noodles
.
Furthermore
, the cups transferred for their labeling and packaging.
Finally
, instant
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noodles
are manufactured
. As
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as product is ready to
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leave
the factory, it
is shipped
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shepping
facility. Then it takes a
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longer time for product to reach the
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market
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