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The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. 15aDn
Here, the diagram represents the differences of expenses of chinese people in urban areas for two different years which are 1995 and 2011. Overall, here are discussed the major categories for both years like the education, transaportation, household facilities, medicines, food and others. For household facilities, there is no change in percentage in both years. There is decline in percentage by 14% and 3% for food and clothing respectively in year 2011 as compared to year 1995. Other than this, the percentage of consumption has been increased for rest of the categories in year 2011 than that of year 1995. Transporation is the one whose percentage has been effected more and increased by 9% in 2011. There is one percentage increase in residential and others category as compared to year 1995. Also, for the recreation and medicine consumption has been increased by 2% and 3% respectively in 2011 as compared to year 1995.
Here, the diagram represents the differences of expenses of
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chinese
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people
in urban areas for two
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different
years which are 1995 and 2011.

Overall
, here
are discussed
the major categories for both years like the education,
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transaportation
, household facilities, medicines, food
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and others
.

For household facilities, there is no
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change
in
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percentage
in both years.

There is decline in
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percentage
by 14% and 3% for food and clothing
respectively
in
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year
2011 as compared to
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year
1995.

Other than this, the
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percentage
of consumption has
been increased
for rest of the categories in
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year
2011 than that of
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year
1995.
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Transporation
is the one whose
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percentage
has
been effected
more and increased by 9% in 2011. There is one
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percentage
increase in residential
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and others
category as compared to
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year
1995.
Also
, for the recreation and medicine consumption has
been increased
by 2% and 3%
respectively
in 2011 as compared to
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year
1995.

IELTS academic The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”.

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