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The diagram below shows the changes of a village in 1995 and now

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The two maps illustrate the main development which has taken place in a village, comparing 1995 with the present. Overall, it seems that a village will be modernised in terms of sport facilities, restaurant, accommodation and car park. To the north of a village, more housing now lines the main road, with the additional opening of a new road branching off to the west. Following that, new apartments along the sea front provide extra accomodation in order to adapt to housing demands which replace the fish market in 1995. To the west of a village, the fishing port existed in 1995 and has now been demolished completely. On the opposite side of the road to the new apartments, a restaurant is installed because the shop was pulled down. Along the sea front, the cafe is still maintained, but a car park is erected on the ground beside the hotel. However, the most striking change is farmland and a forest park in 1995 in the eastern area which has been turned into sports facilities, including golf and tennis.
The two maps illustrate the main development which has taken place in a
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village
, comparing 1995 with the present.

Overall
, it seems that a
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village
will be
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modernised
in terms of sport facilities, restaurant, accommodation and car park.

To the north of a
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village
, more housing
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now
lines the main road, with the additional opening of a new road branching off to the west. Following that, new apartments along the sea front provide extra
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accomodation
in order to adapt to housing demands which replace the fish market in 1995. To the west of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
village
, the fishing port existed in 1995 and has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
been demolished
completely. On the opposite side of the road to the new apartments, a restaurant
is installed
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because
the shop
was pulled
down.

Along the sea front, the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
is
still
maintained,
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but
a car park
is erected
on the ground beside the hotel.
However
, the most striking
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change
is farmland and a forest park in 1995 in the eastern area which has
been turned
into sports facilities, including golf and tennis.
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