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The diagram below shows the changes made in an Australian park in 1990 and in the present 2021.

The diagram below shows the changes made in an Australian park in 1990 and in the present 2021. GMrEo
The information about an Australian park is modified in the period of 30 year from 1990, is illustrated by the assigned layout. Overall, it can be explicitly observed that there are radical transformations have been taken place in current map. Moreover, due to the addition of new facilities the area becomes more congested in 2021. To begin with, in the north side, where there was an ocean which remains at same place, the cycle path is laid beside the ocean. In addition, the cycle path and park Avenue are unchanged and run towards the west and east direction till present day. The whole road divide the park area into four parts. Moving further, in the west side of diagram, barbecue is constructed on the vacant place. Furthermore, there have been added benches nearby the barbecue bar. In the opposite side in east, trees are replanted and cafe is replaced as well; however, the soccer field remains intact in 2021. The newest facility of tennis is introduced in south-east corner.
The information about an Australian park
is modified
in the period of 30 year from 1990,
is illustrated
by the assigned layout.

Overall
, it can be
explicitly
observed that there are radical transformations have
been taken
place in
current
map.
Moreover
, due to the addition of new facilities the area becomes more congested in 2021.

To
begin
with, in the north side, where there was an ocean which remains at same place, the cycle path
is laid
beside the ocean.
In addition
, the cycle path and park Avenue
are unchanged
and run towards the west and east direction till present day. The whole road divide the park area into four parts.

Moving
further
, in the west side of diagram, barbecue
is constructed
on the vacant place.
Furthermore
, there have been
added
benches nearby the barbecue bar. In the opposite side in east, trees
are replanted
and
cafe
is replaced
as well
;
however
, the soccer field remains intact in 2021. The newest facility of tennis
is introduced
in south-east corner.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the changes made in an Australian park in 1990 and in the present 2021.

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