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The diagram below shows the changes made in an Australian park.

The diagram below shows the changes made in an Australian park. JowO6
The information about the alterations of park which is made in Australia is depicted by the layouts. A closer look reveals that numerous amenities have been added, however, ocean, cycle path, park avenue and soccer field are remained unchanged. To embark upon, benches along with barbeque are installed on the south- west side of ocean. furthermore, trees are chopped down and planted on the north- west as well as east sides of soccer field which initially were grown on the south-east direction of cycle path. Moreover, the location of cafe has been changed. On further scrutinising, a new court of tennis is built in North-east side of park avenue. Next, no changes have been made to the park avenue, soccer field, ocean and cycle path.
The information about the alterations of
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park
which
is made
in Australia
is depicted
by the layouts. A closer look reveals that numerous amenities have been
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added
,
however
, ocean, cycle path,
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park
avenue and soccer field
are remained
unchanged. To embark upon, benches along with
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barbeque
are installed
on the south- west side of ocean.
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furthermore
, trees
are chopped
down and planted on the north- west
as well
as east sides of soccer field which
initially
were grown
on the south-east direction of cycle path.
Moreover
, the location of
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cafe
has been
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changed
. On
further
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scrutinising
, a new court of tennis
is built
in North-east side of
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park
avenue.
Next
, no
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changes
have
been made
to the
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park
avenue, soccer field, ocean and cycle path.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the changes made in an Australian park.

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