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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening. ) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see. 88px
The diagram indicates the hours of unpaid work per week done by people in various categories. Overall, when we take a look at the diagram, we can see the unpaid work hours per week are different from each other. There are some fluctuations as well. The married women without children work around 30 hours per week, whilst thr married men work approximately 16 houts per week. The married women with 1-2 children and with 3 or above children work higher than without kids. The figure of that unpaid hours per week are 51 and 55 hours respectively. However, men with the same number of children work almost 17 and 13 hours.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening. ) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

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