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The diagram below shows production of a lead pencil

The diagram below represents the process of making a lead pencil. As an overview, there are 12 stages in this process beginning with planting trees and ending with packaging the pencils. First, some plants are planted. Once the plants have grown for four months, they are ready for the replanting step. \\ As soon as replanted trees have got large enough, they are thinned. Thinned trees then are logged by a cutter in order to procure some thin slats. After, some chemicals are used to shape the thin slats. The shaped slats wait for 60 days before they are covered with groove and black leads by using glue. Afterwards, a new slat is added to the top of the black leaded slat as like a sandwich. When this step is done, a heater hardly presses the sandwich shaped slat. Next, the slat is separated as individual pencils. Finally, separated pencils are painted and stamped and then sharpened for packing stage.

The diagram below represents the process of making a lead pencil. As an overview, there are 12 stages in this process beginning with planting trees and ending with packaging the pencils.

First
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some
 plants are planted
. Once the plants have grown for four months, they are ready for the replanting step. \\ As This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 as replanted trees have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
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enough
, they are thinned
. Thinned trees then are logged
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some
 thin You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwedgebatcanebarwandclub
slats
. “After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 chemicals are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to shape the thin slats.

The shaped You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwedgebatcanebarwandclub
slats
 wait for 60 days This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 they are covered
 with groove and black leads by using glue. Afterwards, a new You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwedgebatcanebarwandclub
slat
 is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
 to the top of the black leaded You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwedgebatcanebarwandclub
slat
 as like a sandwich. When this step is done
, a heater hardly presses the sandwich shaped You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwedgebatcanebarwandclub
slat
. Next
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwedgebatcanebarwandclub
slat
is separated
 as individual pencils. Finally
, separated pencils are painted
 and stamped and then sharpened for packing stage. 