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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of Anthropology graduate did after accomplishment of undergrad studies and the table shows their wages after the 5 tenure years in 3 distinctive field. It is clear that the major graduate did full time works and small portion involved in part-time plus postgrad studies. Moreover, freelance and govt. employee did excellent after the 5-year tenure. Looking at the pie charts, large portion of graduate (52%) interested to involved full time work after their graduation. In contrast, only 28% graduate attached with part time, part-time and post grad, full time postgrad studies. In addition, there are still student have who failed to get any job (12%). In addition to these 8% are unknown. Considering salaries at 5 years of works, there were 80% people who got above the 75k $ in both as Freelance consultants and government employee. But the people who works in private sectors this proportion is just only 55%. And Only a small percentage (less than 10%) employee got less than 50k $.
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their wages after the 5 tenure years in 3 distinctive field.

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IELTS academic The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

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