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The diagram below shows how to operate a hot air balloon

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The illustration shows the ways people activate a hot air balloon. In general, the process includes seven main stages, beginning with laying the envelope and finishing with landing safety. The first step initiates with unwrapping the envelope and laying it wide on the ground. Next, we use a huge fan to inflate the cold air into the balloon until it swells up to its full size. Afterwards, people remove the fan and the balloon is tied up with an enormous basket and butane tanks, which help them to fly. Then, air and butane are combined and burnt till enough heat to reach to the require temperature which help the hot air balloon take off the ground. The balloon is ran by parachute valve and the descent, which is mastermind the speed of balloon. People can go up by turning on the burners to heat the air in the balloon, and they also can go down by opening the parachute valve to allow hot air escape and cool air can rush into the balloon. The ending of the process is landing safety.
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In general
, the process includes seven main stages, beginning with laying the envelope and finishing with landing safety.

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step initiates with unwrapping the envelope and laying it wide on the ground.
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, we
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use
a huge fan to inflate the
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cold
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air
into the
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balloon
until it swells up to its full size. Afterwards,
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people
remove the fan and the
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balloon
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tied up with an enormous basket and butane tanks, which
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them to
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. Then,
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and butane
are combined
and burnt till
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heat to reach to the
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temperature which
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the hot
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balloon
take off the ground. The
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is
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by parachute valve and the descent, which is mastermind the speed of
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.
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can go up by turning on the burners to heat the
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in the
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, and they
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hot
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escape and cool
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can rush into the
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balloon
. The ending of the process is landing safety.
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