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The diagram below shows how pears are canned.

The diagram below shows how pears are canned. oEAGw
The diagram demonstrates the process of making canned pear. There are fourteen steps in the process, beginning with picking pears by hand and ending with despatching the finished product to stores and markets to be sold. To start with, the pears are picked by hand and sent to the factory by truck. The pears are then washed, checked, and stored at a low temperature to ensure the quality of the product. Following this, the pears are graded weighed in order to sort into different grade.
The diagram demonstrates the process of making canned pear. There are fourteen steps in the process, beginning with picking pears by hand and ending with despatching the finished product to stores and markets to
be sold
.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with, the pears
are picked
by hand and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to the factory by truck. The pears are then washed,
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checked
, and stored at a low temperature to ensure the quality of the product. Following this, the pears
are graded
weighed in order to sort into
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different
grade.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how pears are canned.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
85 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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