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The diagram below shows how pears are canned.

The diagram below shows how pears are canned. oEAGw

The diagram demonstrates the process of making canned pear. There are fourteen steps in the process, beginning with picking pears by hand and ending with despatching the finished product to stores and markets to be sold. To start with, the pears are picked by hand and sent to the factory by truck. The pears are then washed, checked, and stored at a low temperature to ensure the quality of the product. Following this, the pears are graded weighed in order to sort into different grade.

The diagram demonstrates the process of making canned pear. There are fourteen steps in the process, beginning with picking pears by hand and ending with despatching the finished product to stores and markets to be sold
.

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start
 with, the pears are picked
 by hand and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 to the factory by truck. The pears are then washed, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitored
checked
, and stored at a low temperature to ensure the quality of the product. Following this, the pears are graded
 weighed in order to sort into This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 grade. 

IELTS academic The diagram below shows how pears are canned.

Academic

American English

2 paragraphs

85 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 7.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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