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The diagram below shows how Olive Oil is manufactured.

This diagram illustrates the way how olive oil is produced. overall, The process consists of seven stages starting with collecting fresh fruits and ending with storage and sale. In each stage, work must be done. First of all the fruits should be collected from tree and collected into a small box, After that they should be washed and rinsed in cold water. In the next process, the olives should be separated by a belt, Then it was smashed into olive paste and olive stones. In the next process which is stuffed into the bags having holes before pressing them. As soon as the bags filled with pastes are pressed, the oil is then extracted in the next step called Extraction where oil and water are separated from each other. At last, the final product is delivered to the warehouse or shops in order to store or sell them.
This diagram illustrates the way how olive oil
is produced
.
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overall
, The process consists of seven stages starting with collecting fresh fruits and ending with storage and sale. In each stage, work
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must
be done
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First of all
the fruits should
be collected
from tree and collected into a
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small
box, After that they should
be washed
and rinsed in
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cold
water. In the
next
process, the
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olives
should
be separated
by a belt, Then it
was smashed
into olive paste and olive stones. In the
next
process which
is stuffed
into the bags having holes
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before
pressing them. As
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soon
as the bags filled with pastes
are pressed
, the oil is then extracted in the
next
step called Extraction where oil and water
are separated
from each other. At last, the final product
is delivered
to the warehouse or shops in order to store or sell them.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how Olive Oil is manufactured.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
148 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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