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The diagram depicts the evolution of the aeroplane in terms of its features over the course of a century.

The diagram depicts the evolution of the aeroplane in terms of its features over the course of a century. The most noticeable difference between the three planes is the length of each body. The Wright Flyer was only 6 metres when it was designed in 1903, whereas in the next 30 years, the Douglas DC-3 was built longer, at 20 metres. There was a drastic change over the next 70 years when the Airbus A380 was introduced, with a 73 metre body. This, in turn, allowed the more modern planes to be able to carry a larger number of passengers. For example, only one pilot could fly the Wright Flyer and the Douglas DC-3 was able to hold 31 people including 3 crew members. Later on, the Airbus A380 was made to be able to carry 555 passengers. Not only that, the wingspan of each plane was progressively extended over the years. The first plane started off with just 12 metres of wingspan and this rose to 29 metres with the Douglas DC-3, and finally the most modern plane, the Airbus A380 was fixed to have that of 80 metres. Consequently, there was a significant increase in terms of the speed of the planes, starting as low as 16 km/hr, to traveling at 347 km/hr by 1935, and the fastest in 2004, at 1050 km/hr. Overall, over the years, there was a significant advancement of aeroplanes revolving around the size, passenger capacity, wingspan and speed.
The diagram depicts the evolution of the
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aeroplane
in terms of its features
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over
the course of a century.

The most noticeable difference between the three
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planes
is the length of each body.
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The
Wright Flyer was
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only
6
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metres
when it
was designed
in 1903, whereas in the
next
30 years, the Douglas DC-3
was built
longer, at 20
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metres
. There was a drastic
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change
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over
the
next
70 years when the Airbus A380
was introduced
, with a 73
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metre
body. This, in turn,
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allowed
the more modern
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planes
to be able to carry a larger number of passengers.
For example
,
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only
one pilot could
fly
the Wright Flyer and the Douglas DC-3 was able to hold 31
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people
including 3 crew members. Later on, the Airbus A380
was made
to be able to carry 555 passengers. Not
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only
that, the wingspan of each
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plane
was
progressively
extended
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over
the years. The
first
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plane
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started
off with
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just
12
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metres
of wingspan and this rose to 29
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metres
with the Douglas DC-3, and
finally
the most modern
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plane
, the Airbus A380 was
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fixed
to have that of 80
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metres
.
Consequently
, there was a significant increase in terms of the speed of the
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planes
, starting as low as 16 km/hr, to traveling at 347 km/hr by 1935, and the fastest in 2004, at 1050 km/hr.

Overall
,
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over
the years, there was a significant advancement of
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aeroplanes
revolving around the size, passenger capacity, wingspan and speed.
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IELTS academic The diagram depicts the evolution of the aeroplane in terms of its features over the course of a century.

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