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the diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make compararions where relevant

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This table shows information about the process of making a fish pie, which include peace, fish, sauce and potato. Overall, there are about 14 stages in the diagram, starting from the cleaning of potatoes to delivering fish pie to the stores. First of all, the potatoes are delivered to a manufacturing fabric by lorry. The next step is that the cleaned potatoes cut to slices and then they are boiled. Once the potatoes have been boiled, the potatoes then chilled and stored, before the fresh salmon is being produced. After the potato preparation is ready, fish salmon is delivered as at the first step. Next the lemon juice and salt are added to salmon, then it is removed from skin and bones. After being removed, they are inspected by the special worker, and the next step includes preparing peas and sauce. And the final step is that the freezed product is packed and stored.
This table
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shows
information about the process of making a fish pie, which include peace, fish, sauce and potato.

Overall
, there are about 14 stages in the diagram, starting from the cleaning of
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potatoes
to delivering fish pie to the stores.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the
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potatoes
are delivered
to a manufacturing fabric by lorry. The
next
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step
is that the cleaned
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potatoes
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cut
to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
slices and
then they
are boiled
. Once the
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potatoes
have
been boiled
, the
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potatoes
then chilled and stored,
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before
the fresh salmon is
being produced
.

After the
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potato
preparation is ready, fish salmon
is delivered
as at the
first
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step
.
Next
the lemon juice and salt are
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added
to salmon, then it
is removed
from skin and bones. After
being removed
, they
are inspected
by the special worker, and the
next
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step
includes preparing peas and sauce. And the final
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step
is that the
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "froze", the past tense form of the verb 'freeze'?
freezed
product
is packed
and stored.
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IELTS academic the diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen pies.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
154 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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