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the diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make compararions where relevant

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This table shows information about the process of making a fish pie, which include peace, fish, sauce and potato. Overall, there are about 14 stages in the diagram, starting from the cleaning of potatoes to delivering fish pie to the stores. First of all, the potatoes are delivered to a manufacturing fabric by lorry. The next step is that the cleaned potatoes cut to slices and then they are boiled. Once the potatoes have been boiled, the potatoes then chilled and stored, before the fresh salmon is being produced. After the potato preparation is ready, fish salmon is delivered as at the first step. Next the lemon juice and salt are added to salmon, then it is removed from skin and bones. After being removed, they are inspected by the special worker, and the next step includes preparing peas and sauce. And the final step is that the freezed product is packed and stored.

This table This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 information about the process of making a fish pie, which include peace, fish, sauce and potato.

Overall
, there are about 14 stages in the diagram, starting from the cleaning of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyam
potatoes
 to delivering fish pie to the stores.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyam
potatoes
are delivered
 to a manufacturing fabric by lorry. The next
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step
 is that the cleaned You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyam
potatoes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
 to Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).slices, and
slices and
 then they are boiled
. Once the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyam
potatoes
 have been boiled
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyam
potatoes
 then chilled and stored, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 the fresh salmon is being produced
.

After the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyam
potato
 preparation is ready, fish salmon is delivered
 as at the first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
step
. Next
 the lemon juice and salt are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
 to salmon, then it is removed
 from skin and bones. After being removed
, they are inspected
 by the special worker, and the next
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step
 includes preparing peas and sauce. And the final You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
step
 is that the Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "froze", the past tense form of the verb 'freeze'?frozefreezefreezesfreezerbreezedfree zed
freezed
 product is packed
 and stored. 