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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station

The picture demonstrates how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station by using the flowing of the river from the high-level reservoir and low-level reservoir. Firstly, the water from the river enters the small entrance under the damn which opens at day time. After that, it’ll flow along with the pipe to the generator and electricity will be created by using the flowing of water and the generator, and finally, it will be sent off to the National Grid by using power lines as a way to transport electricity, while the water will flow to the low-level reservoir. Alternatively, if it’s night then it won’t operate the same way as to how the day time operates. It’ll travel in a reverse direction comparing to the day time’s one. Water that’s located at the low-level reservoir will be traveled back to the generator. Secondly, it’ll be pumped by using the generator to pump the water to the high-level reservoir and causing it to travel out to the exit under the dam. In conclusion, a hydroelectric power station operates in the daytime, which will be used as a time to creates electricity and sent it off to National Grid. On the other hand, the generator won’t generate electricity at night time, instead, it’ll be used as a way to pump those water out to the high-level reservoir, in the opposite direction as the day time’s one.
The picture demonstrates how
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electricity
is generated
in a hydroelectric power station by using the flowing of the river from the high-level
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reservoir
and low-level reservoir.

Firstly
, the
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water
from the river enters the
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small
entrance under the damn which opens at day
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time
. After that,
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it’ll
flow along with the pipe to the generator and
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electricity
will
be created
by using the flowing of
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water
and the generator, and
finally
, it will be
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sent
off to the National Grid by using power lines as a way to transport
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electricity
, while the
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water
will flow to the low-level reservoir.

Alternatively
, if it’s night then it won’t operate the same way as to how the day
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time
operates.
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It’ll
travel in a reverse direction comparing to the day
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time’s
one.
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Water
that’s located at the low-level
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reservoir
will
be traveled
back to the generator.
Secondly
,
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it’ll
be pumped
by using the generator to pump the
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water
to the high-level
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reservoir
and causing it to travel out to the exit under the dam.

In conclusion
, a hydroelectric power station operates in the daytime, which will be
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used
as a
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time
to creates
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electricity
and
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sent
it off to National Grid.
On the other hand
, the generator won’t generate
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electricity
at night
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time
,
instead
,
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it’ll
be
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used
as a way to pump those
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water
out to the high-level
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reservoir
, in the opposite direction as the day
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time’s
one.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station

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235 words
6.5
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