Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The diagram below shows how a hot water system in a house works. The table gives information about the efficiency levels.

The diagram below shows how a hot water system in a house works. The table gives information about the efficiency levels. o8BGK
Generally, we have two pictures that indicate 2 types of information, the first diagram illustrates some information about how a hot water system in a house works, and the second table indicates information about the efficiency levels. process of creating heat begins from a cold water tank that it fills with a tap. ball valve that has been laid in the tank prevents pouring water. at the first step, cold water transfers to hot water cylinder that its responsibility is transferring cold water to the boiler. the boiler after boiling water transfers this to the radiator that is the last stage of this process. the radiator keeps the house warm and spreads the hot air in the space. also, this transfer cold water to the hot water cylinder again. in addition, efficiency level shows us that what types of fossils resources are more efficient. according to this picture, we observe that Gas fired heating is the greatest.
Generally
, we have two pictures that indicate 2 types of information, the
first
diagram illustrates
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information about how a hot
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
system in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
works, and the second table indicates information about the efficiency levels.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
process
of creating heat
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begins
from a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
tank that it fills with a tap.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
ball
valve that has
been laid
in the tank
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevents
pouring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
at
the
first
step,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
transfers to hot
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
cylinder that its responsibility is transferring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
to the boiler.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
the
boiler after boiling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
transfers this to the radiator
that is
the last stage of this process.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
the
radiator
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keeps
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
warm and spreads the hot air in the space.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
also
, this transfer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
to the hot
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
cylinder again.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
in
addition, efficiency level
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
us that what types of fossils resources are more efficient.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
according
to this picture, we observe that Gas fired heating is the greatest.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The diagram below shows how a hot water system in a house works. The table gives information about the efficiency levels.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The diagram below shows how a hot water system in a house works. The table gives information about the efficiency levels.