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the diagram below shows hacking attempts on an internationally reputed website per month from 1997 to 2007.

the diagram below shows hacking attempts on an internationally reputed website per month from 1997 to 2007. YBbAn

The bar chart describe the data about cracker hacked famous global web-page in every calendar month during eleven years. overall, the hacking efforts per month declined to one third compare to what it was ten years before. Firstly, it can be clearly seen that average number of hacking try per month nearly 440 in the year of 1997. However after that, it declined to almost 245 the following year and it hit the lowest number of 75 in 1999. After that the website again hacking by cyberpunk and remained around 200 every month for two following two years. Secondly, average monthly efforts to hack the web-page then, stayed in the range of 90 between 2002 to 2004. next, it dementedly shot up to more than in 2005, it is approximately 160. In the last two years followed by nearly 100 and 140 crackers attempts every month.

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