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The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park secondary school since it’s construction in 1950

The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park secondary school since it’s construction in 1950 jl9a

The maps illustrate the renovation from 1950 to 2010 at West Park Secondary School. Overall, it is noticeable that a school building and playground remained the same since 1950. Moreover, the car park the built in 1980 has expanded the area. On the contrary, the other areas have been replace and reduce the size over time. Focusing on 1950 to 1980, the data reveals that in 1950 the school located on the right side of the horses and above the playground, which located beside the farmland. Furthermore, after 30 years, the school and playground remained at the same position. However, science block and car park have replace the horses, and the short held has been instead of farmland. Turning to 2010, the school main building and science block stayed the same; however, the builders have reduce the size of the playground and replace with the sport field. In addition, the car park has extended the area to the short held.

The maps illustrate the renovation from 1950 to 2010 at West You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlawnsquaregardenestateplazaplace
Park
 Secondary School.

Overall
, it is noticeable that a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 building and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpark
playground
 remained the same since 1950. Moreover
, the car You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlawnsquaregardenestateplazaplace
park
 the A hyphen is missing in the adjective "built-in".built-in
built in
 1980 has expanded the area. On the contrary
, the other areas have been Consider using a past participle here: "replaced".replaced
replace
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reduce
 the size over time.

Focusing on 1950 to 1980, the data reveals that in 1950 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 located on the right side of the horses and above the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpark
playground
, which located beside the farmland. Furthermore
, after 30 years, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpark
playground
 remained at the same position. However
, science block and car You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlawnsquaregardenestateplazaplace
park
 have Use past participle here: "replaced".replaced
replace
 the horses, and the short held has been instead
 of farmland.

Turning to 2010, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstituteacademyuniversityhalljailfaculty
school
 main building and science block stayed the same; however
, the builders have Use past participle here: "reduced".reduced
reduce
 the size of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpark
playground
 and replace with the sport field. In addition
, the car You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlawnsquaregardenestateplazaplace
park
 has extended the area to the short held. 