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The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. n3WR
The two pie charts illustrate the amount of money spent on various sources by chinese urbans over a 16 years from 1995 to 2011. Overall, in both years, the most significant source of consumption was on food which together accounted over a three quarters whereas, others and medicine has least proportion in the starting year as opposed to others in 2011. In terms of food, it comprises exactly half of the consumption in 1995 and it gradually decreased to 36% in the fianl year. Likewise, Clothing consumption consists of (14. 0% and 11. 0% respectively). Also, Household Facilities which remains unchanged in both years. with regards to the remaining categories of consumption, there was a slight rise in percentage in the last year. Medicine, it started with 3% and increased it ratio just over the double which is 7%. similarly, Transportaton and C comprises exactly 5% in 1995 and ended up with 14%. Here, Recreation(Education) consumption has just increased by 2% over 16 years period which is 12%. In fact, both others and Residential sources were slight increase of about a mere by 1% to 4% and 9% respectively.
The two pie charts illustrate the amount of money spent on various sources by
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chinese
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urbans
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a 16 years from 1995 to 2011.

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, in both years, the most significant source of
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consumption
was on food which together accounted
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over
a three quarters whereas, others and medicine has
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least
proportion in the starting
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year
as opposed to others in 2011.

In terms of food, it comprises exactly half of the
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consumption
in 1995 and it
gradually
decreased to 36% in the
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fianl
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year
.
Likewise
, Clothing
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consumption
consists of (14. 0% and 11. 0%
respectively
).
Also
, Household Facilities which remains unchanged in both years.

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with regards to
the remaining categories of
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consumption
, there was a slight rise in percentage in the last
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year
. Medicine, it
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started
with 3% and increased it ratio
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just
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over
the double which is 7%.
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similarly
,
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Transportaton
and C comprises exactly 5% in 1995 and ended up with 14%. Here, Recreation(Education)
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consumption
has
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just
increased by 2%
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over
16 years period which is 12%. In fact, both others and Residential sources were slight increase of about a mere by 1% to 4% and 9%
respectively
.

IELTS academic The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”.

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