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The diagram about the processing of aluminum cans

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The diagram illustrates the reproducing of used cans. Firstly, used cans are collected out of a trash, they are brought to a factory by a special cars. There these dishes are cleaned, sorted by their shapes and sizes, shredded later they are compressed. They are fed into a heater for melting these aluminum cans. Then the material is rolled in order to make a can again. All recycled cans are sent to the production centers but the percentage of recycling must be written on the cans Overall, people throw away a lot of rubbish every day but many of them are recycled for human again
The diagram illustrates the reproducing of
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,
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cans
are collected
out of a trash, they
are brought
to a factory by a special
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. There these dishes
are cleaned
, sorted by their shapes and sizes, shredded later they
are compressed
. They
are fed
into a heater for melting these aluminum
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cans
. Then the material
is rolled
in order to
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make
a
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again. All recycled
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cans
are
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sent
to the production centers
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but
the percentage of recycling
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must
be written
on the
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cans
Overall
,
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people
throw away
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a lot of
rubbish every day
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many
of them
are recycled
for human
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IELTS academic The diagram about the processing of aluminum cans

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
104 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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