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The line graph demonstrates how many female and male students studied in six major subjects at a US university in 2010.

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The graph below illustrates information about hơ many US's students studying six main subjects in 2010. It is clear that the number of students studying Finance was the highest in the six main subjects given and had the same percentage of female and male studying. Also while the number of female studying Accounting and Marketing are higher than male, the opposite was true for Economics, Engineering and Matheematics. As can be seem from the graph, in 2010, the figure for female and male studying Finance was the same and reach a pick of around 230 students. Accounting was the second subject which had many female choosen to study. Followed by Marketing with around 120 students. While, the figure for male studying Mathematics was the seconf highest followed by Finance with 200 students. The next was Economics only 150 students and hit a low of 55 for Engineering.
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Finance was the highest in the six main subjects
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Accounting and Marketing are higher than male, the opposite was true for Economics, Engineering and
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Finance was the same and reach a pick of around 230
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