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The depicted pie charts and table illustrate the sources of fish import to the us in 3 years and the total rates.

The depicted pie charts and table illustrate the sources of fish import to the us in 3 years and the total rates. abNY
The depicted pie charts and table illustrate the sources of fish import to the us in 3 years and the total rates. Overall, it can be clearly seen that Canada import decreased. By contrast with it, import from China and other regions increased during the same period of time. It is interesting to note that in 2000 import rate in USA was the highest among given years. Looking at the pie charts in more details, it is substantial that in 1988, more than half of us import was done by Canada, whereas the percentage of china import in us was only 27. Additionally, from 1988 till 1992 the import to us from other areas rose from 13 percent till 20. In 2000, the figure of china import to us was 42 percent, meanwhile, canada export dropped till 28 percent. It could be explained by the fact that total value of us inport in 1988 was the lowest among given regions - 6. 57. Furthermore, the figure increased, so in 1992 total rate was 8. 52 billions of dollars. And the highest value was noticed in 2000 - 10. 72 billions
The depicted pie charts and table illustrate the sources of fish
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the us
in 3 years and the total rates.

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clearly
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that Canada
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import
decreased. By contrast with it,
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from China and other regions increased during the same period of time. It is interesting to note that in 2000
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import
rate
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in USA
was the highest among
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years.

Looking at the pie charts in more
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details
, it is substantial that in 1988, more than half of us
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import
was done
by Canada, whereas the percentage of china
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in us was
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only
27.
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,
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from 1988 till 1992
the
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to us from other areas rose from 13 percent till 20. In 2000, the figure of china
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import
to us was 42 percent, meanwhile,
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canada
export dropped till 28 percent.

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explained
by the fact that total value of us
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inport
in 1988 was the lowest among
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given
regions
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6. 57.
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in 1992 total rate was 8.
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2000 - 10
. 72 billions
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IELTS academic The depicted pie charts and table illustrate the sources of fish import to the us in 3 years and the total rates.

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