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The stock price of four tech companies for the period of 2011 until 2016, is illustrated in the graph.

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The stock price of four tech companies for the period of 2011 until 2016, is illustrated in the graph. Overall, there is consistent growth of Facebook, while yahoo steadily decreased. In contrast to apple who had an erratic price of stock over the period shown in the graph, differing from google whose stock price stayed unmoved meanwhile. As seen in the graph, the price of Facebook stock grew continually from 2011, when the stock was valued at 7000, until 2016 when it peaked at 20000. Meanwhile yahoo’s stock experienced a gradual decline from 5000 in 2011, until reaching its lowest price at 2500 in 2016. Whereas the trajectory of the price of Google stock was less linear, primarily increasing from 5000 in 2011, up to 35000 in 2012 before plummeting the year after, settling at 6000, moreover it was followed by another rise and fall eventually stabilizing at 6000 in 2016. On the other hand, the price of Google stock was incredibly consistent, as it stayed at 1000 over the whole period.

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