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The bar chart illustrates how people commuted to and from work over a 40-year time period in one European city.

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The bar chart illustrates how people commuted to and from work over a 40-year time period in one European city. The data are for the years 1960, 1980 and 2000 and are given proportionally. Almost 40% of commuters used the bus in 1960 which was the most popular mode of transport in that year. However, that number had decreased to 15% by 1980 making it the least used conveyance mode. During the same time period, the proportion of people journeying to work by car increased from just above 5% to roughly 38%. Usage of the train and tube remained comparatively more stable over the 40 years. Numbers for the tube hovered around 25%, while the train showed slightly more variability around 23%. In summary, it can be seen that commuters dropped the bus in favour of the car as their chosen mode of transport over the 40 years, whereas there weren’t any strong trends in the use of rail-based travel.
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time period in one European city. The data are for the years 1960, 1980 and 2000 and are
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, that number had decreased to 15% by 1980 making it the least
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conveyance mode. During the same time period, the proportion of
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journeying to work by car increased from
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above 5% to roughly 38%.

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more variability around 23%.

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that commuters dropped the bus in
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of the car as their chosen mode of transport over the 40 years, whereas there weren’t any strong trends in the
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of rail-based travel.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates how people commuted to and from work over a 40-year time period in one European city.

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