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The column chart shows the percentage of male and female in various age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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The column chart illustrates the proportion of male and female in various age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. As can be seen, the period from 25 to over, female always registered percentages higher than male According to the given chart, the female’ age groups from 15 years old to 54 years old, which increase from 47. 7 to 53. 3 percent before going down to 47. 1 percent in the 65 years and over group. While the male age groups declined significantly from 52. 8 percent, 42. 2percent, 39. 5 percent respectively in 3 groups, which are 15 years old to 24 years old, 25 years old to 34, and 35 years old 44 years old, after that, the percentage in 3 groups from 45 to over, which was upbeat from 43. 1 percent in 45 to 54 years old and reached 46. 7 percent in the very last group. To summarize, men did regular activity physical more often than women during their teenager and mid -twenties After mid-twenties, however, men’s percentage was decreased and women’s percentage was increase
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who did regular physical activity in 2010. As can be
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, the period from 25 to over, female always registered
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from 15 years
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to 54 years
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, which increase from 47. 7 to 53. 3
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, 42.
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, 39. 5
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to 24 years
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44 years
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did regular activity physical more
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IELTS academic The column chart shows the percentage of male and female in various age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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