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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. 8DyV
The line graph outlines the rate of people who are jobless in the rural and urban area of Australia in the year 2012. The unemployment rates are shown in percentage from first to fourth quarters of the year. To begin with, approximately 6. 5% of people were workless in the starting quarter of years in rural area of Australia. In addition, unemployment rate gradually took off and made a dipped at second quarter of the year but unemployment rate in rural are fluctuates and end with 5. 1% in fourth quarter of the year. On the other hand, more than 2% of the people were unemployed in urban area in first quarter of years. After than, it soarded and reached 4% which made a peak point in second quarter of year it fluctuated and meet 5% of joble people by the last year which is parallel to rural areas of Australia. In general at first unemployment rate in rural area was on decreasing trend while it was exactly opposite in rural areas in first quarter of year. However, in the final quarter, they meet the same unemployment rate.
The line graph outlines the
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2012. The
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first
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unemployment
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year
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unemployment
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unemployment
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rural
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area
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IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
188 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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