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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. PxVw
The charts depict changes in tourism of two nations from 1960 to 2010. Overall, Australia and Germany saw a drastic growth of Asian tourists from 1960 to 2010. While, the maximum number of tourists in Germany was from Europe, Australia saw a spectacular decline in European tourists between 1960 and 2010. In Australia, the number of Asian tourists were less with 10% only in 1960 that went up to 63% in 2010. Although, there was a slight decrease of 5% tourists from USA and Britain from 1960 to 2010, the number of European tourists dropped dramatically from 53% to 10% over the 50 year period from1960 to 2010. In Germany, a gradual dip of 5% was seen in the number of tourists from Europe that was from 45% in 1960 to 40% in 2010. Also, a sharp decrease of tourists from Britain was seen that went down from 20% in 1960 to 6% in 2010. A significant rise in Asian and USA tourists was seen with an increase of 15% and 4% respectively.
The charts depict
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changes
in tourism of two nations from 1960 to 2010.

Overall
, Australia and Germany
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saw
a drastic growth of Asian
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tourists
from 1960 to 2010. While, the maximum
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number
of
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tourists
in Germany was from Europe, Australia
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saw
a spectacular decline in European
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tourists
between 1960 and 2010.

In Australia, the
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number
of Asian
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tourists
were less with 10%
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only
in 1960 that went up to 63% in 2010. Although, there was a slight decrease of 5%
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tourists
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from USA
and Britain from 1960 to 2010, the
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number
of European
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tourists
dropped
dramatically
from 53% to 10% over the
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50 year
period from1960 to 2010.

In Germany, a gradual dip of 5% was
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seen
in the
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number
of
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tourists
from Europe that was from 45% in 1960 to 40% in 2010.
Also
, a sharp decrease of
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tourists
from Britain was
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seen
that went down from 20% in 1960 to 6% in 2010. A significant rise in Asian and USA
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tourists
was
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seen
with an increase of 15% and 4%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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