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The table below show the information and regarding the change in percentage of population aged 65 and above in three different countries Canada UK and Germany and estimate prediction of the population in 19 88 to 2030

The table below show the information and regarding the change in percentage of population aged 65 and above in three different countries Canada UK and Germany and estimate prediction of the population in 19 88 to 2030 rBw2

, The table depicts the information about the proportion of the population who are 65 years old and over in three countries Canada, Germany, and the UK in 1980 2000 and an estimated percentage in 2030. Overall, it can be seen that the highest number of elderly people group was in Germany whereas the lowest number of people were in the UK. In Canada population was followed the increasing trend over the given period. In 1988, the aging population of Canada, Germany, and the UK was 16. 32%, 20. 45 %, and 14. 23% respectively which was followed the upward trend in 2000. Canada's population was increased by approximately 4. 35% as is predicted to rise 5. 68 % after 30 years. In Germany, the aging population went up by 20. 45 % in 1988. After 13 years it rose to 25. 32% which was accounted as a highest than other two countries. The estimated population will be 30. 42% in Germany in 2030 whereas elder people in the UK were 14. 23% which was the lowest in the starting year after 13 years it remained the same but it is estimated to rise to almost 20. 35% in 2030.

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