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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. GeD2
The given pie charts manifest information of travellers from the Britain, Europe, Asia and the USA visiting two nations, namely Australia and Germany, over a span of five decinniums from 1960. We can scrutinize from the data, that in the year of 1960 both the countries were visited by cavernous European visitors, whereas acute travellers were from Asia. In the mean while, number of British visitors visiting these countries were consolidated, being about a quarter for Australia and two in ten for Germany. Furthemore, only nearby half of American nationalities travelled to Australia, than those which travelled to Germany in the same year. However, five decades later, number of Asian visiters capulted for Australia increasing by nearly 6 times. In contrast to which, the Asian travellers demonstrated a meticulous escalation by only 15% for Germany. An abstruse plunge was seen in number of British travellers for Germany, as well as in European travellers for Australia. To abbreviate, it can be stated that over the time span, European nationalities, somehow lost their interest in travelling to Australia, despite of being the major visitor in the beginning of the time scale. In contrary, Asian citizens were more attracted in travelling to Australia by the end of the time scale, rather than they were in 1960.
The
given
pie charts manifest information of
travellers
from the Britain, Europe, Asia and the USA visiting two nations,
namely
Australia and Germany, over a span of five
decinniums
from 1960.

We can scrutinize from the data, that in the year of 1960 both the countries
were visited
by cavernous European visitors, whereas acute
travellers
were from Asia. In the
mean while
, number of British visitors visiting these countries
were consolidated
, being about a quarter for Australia and two in ten for Germany.
Furthemore
,
only
nearby half of American nationalities travelled to Australia, than those which travelled to Germany in the same year.

However
, five decades later, number of Asian
visiters
capulted
for Australia increasing by
nearly
6
times
.
In contrast
to which, the Asian
travellers
demonstrated a meticulous escalation by
only
15% for Germany. An abstruse plunge was
seen
in number of British
travellers
for Germany,
as well
as in European
travellers
for Australia.

To abbreviate, it can
be stated
that over the
time
span, European nationalities, somehow lost their interest in travelling to Australia,
despite of
being the major visitor in the beginning of the
time
scale. In contrary, Asian citizens were more attracted in travelling to Australia by the
end
of the
time
scale,
rather
than they were in 1960.
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IELTS academic The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

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