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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. B5pj
The given bar charts above present a change of travelling in Australia and Germany for about 50-year term. Overall, it is explicitly conspicuous that the most popular part for Australian tourists in 1960 was to Europe but that trend was changed in 2010. It can be seen that travelling to Asia exceeded among Australian people in 2010 by hugest indicator by sixty three percent in two periods. Now, turning to details, it can be noticed that in Germany citizens in both age categories were more interested in Europe tourism. It may be aproved by rate in forty five percent in 1960 and forty percent eleven years ago. It is clear observed that travelling to Britain by Germans in 2010 was decreased by forteen percent and was rised to Asia from ten to twenty five percent. In addition it could be viewed that the constantest tourism in Germany was to USA. The index of that travelling over fifty years stayed almost the same.
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in Australia and Germany for about 50-year term.

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to Asia exceeded among Australian
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in two periods.

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in 1960 and forty
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over fifty years stayed almost the same.
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IELTS academic The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

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