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The charts demonstrate the midpoint of temperatures per month and the hours of sunshine in the year in London, New York, and Sydney.

The charts demonstrate the midpoint of temperatures per month and the hours of sunshine in the year in London, New York, and Sydney. k58we
The charts demonstrate the midpoint of temperatures per month and the hours of sunshine in the year in London, New York, and Sydney. Overall, it's clearly seen that in Sydney temperature become warmer and then decrease in the mid year and then back to basic. In contrast, London' and New York temperature tend to be colder ate the beginning, then slightly increase in the middle and slowly decrease back to the same number. In January in London, starting with 9 Celsius and stable increase until between July and August with 23%, after that the amount of Celsius are slowly decline from 23% to 9% in the end of the year. In New York, it is the city that can see the change the most. In the beginning of the year, New York start with 4% which is the lowest temperature in these 3 cities. Obviously, between March to one quarter in July, the temperature sharply increase from 7% to approximately 29%, then slightly go down to the same level in December with 5%. In contrast, Sydney start with the highest heat with 26%, and stable the same till March. In April, the temperature start to fall from 23% to 16% in July. After in July, the heat is gradually rise from 16% to about 24% in December. Sydney is the only one cities that decrease first and then grow. From the table, It's observe that New York has the most hours of sunshine than the others two cities with 2535 hours, followed by Sydney with 2473 hours, and the lowest is London with 1180 hours respectively.
The charts demonstrate the midpoint of
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per month and the
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of sunshine in the year in London,
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New
York, and Sydney.

Overall
, it's
clearly
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seen
that in Sydney
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temperature
become warmer and then decrease in the
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mid year
and then back to basic.
In contrast
, London' and
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New
York
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temperature
tend to be colder ate the beginning, then
slightly
increase in the middle and
slowly
decrease back to the same number.

In January in London, starting with 9 Celsius and stable increase until between July and August with 23%, after that the amount of Celsius are
slowly
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decline
from 23% to 9% in the
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end
of the year.

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In
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New
York, it is the city that can
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see
the
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In
the beginning of the year,
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New
York
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start
with 4% which is the lowest
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temperature
in these 3
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cities
.
Obviously
, between March to one quarter in July, the
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temperature
sharply
increase from 7% to approximately 29%, then
slightly
go down to the same level in December with 5%.

In contrast
, Sydney
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with the highest heat with 26%, and stable the same till March. In April, the
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temperature
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to fall from 23% to 16% in July. After in July, the heat is
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rise
from 16% to about 24% in December. Sydney is the
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one
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cities
that decrease
first
and then grow.

From the table, It's observe that
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New
York has the most
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hours
of sunshine than the others two
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cities
with 2535
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, followed by Sydney with 2473
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, and the lowest is London with 1180
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respectively
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