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The charts compares the amount of electricity generated by various fuel sources in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000

The charts compares the amount of electricity generated by various fuel sources in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000 Jwqq0
The charts compares the amount of electricity generated by various fuel sources in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000 In 1980, coal was the most commonly used fuel source covering over half of the 100 units of electricity produced. Both hydro power and natural gasses were also used as fuel, each accounts for 20 units while oil usage as fuel covers the remaining 10 units. By 2000, the usage of both oil and natural gasses as fuels experienced a decrease as a result both sources produces just 2 units each. The amount of electricity produced by hydro power rose to 36 units while coal stays as the main fuel source at 130 units produced On contrary, in 1980, France starts utilizing nuclear power generating 15 units of the total 90 units. Natural gas and coal were the most dominant fuel types, both accounts for 25 units each. While the remaining 25 units were made by oil and hydro powers, 20 and 5 units respectively. By 2000, nuclear power became the main fuel source as it produced 126 units of electricity. As natural gasses usage dropped to the same amount as hydro power, both of them produces only 2 units. Meanwhile, oil’s usage rose up to equal coal’s, which produces 25 units of electricity. In conclusion, coals has always been Australia main fuel source while France opt for nuclear power as time goes on.
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the amount of
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electricity
generated by various
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fuel
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in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000

In 1980, coal was the most
commonly
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used
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fuel
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covering over half of the 100
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units
of
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electricity
produced. Both hydro
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power
and
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natural
gasses were
also
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fuel
, each accounts for 20
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while
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oil
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as
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covers the remaining 10
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. By 2000, the
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of both
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oil
and
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gasses as
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fuels
experienced a decrease
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2
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each. The amount of
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produced by hydro
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rose to 36
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units
while coal stays as the main
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fuel
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source
at 130
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produced


On contrary, in 1980, France
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utilizing nuclear
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generating 15
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of the total 90
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.
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Natural
gas and coal were the most dominant
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types, both accounts for 25
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each. While the remaining 25
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were made
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and hydro
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, 20 and 5
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respectively
. By 2000, nuclear
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became the main
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fuel
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as it produced 126
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of
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electricity
. As
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natural
gasses
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dropped to the same amount as hydro
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power
, both of them produces
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2
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oil’s
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rose up to equal coal’s, which produces 25
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of electricity.

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while France opt for nuclear
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power
as time goes on.
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