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WRITING TASK 1 - DESCRIBING A GRAPH

WRITING TASK 1 - DESCRIBING A GRAPH x8OPg

The graph above shows yearly revenue data for three bakeries in London from 2000 to 2010. Overall, over ten years, while the Bernie's Buns and Robbie's Bakery tend to have continued to increase, the Lovely Loaves numbers of earnings have declined. Firstly, in the period between 2000 and 2002 Bernie’s Buns yearly earnings fluctuated sharply which began around 23000£ before rose substantially from 2006 until 2010. Regarding Robbie’s Bakery, Between 2000 and 2005 the annual earnings of Robbie’s Bakery remained stable by earning 49000£. Moreover, Robbie’s Bakery started to increase significantly in 2006. In contrast, The annual income of Lovely Loaves started at around 90500£ in 2000 then followed by a fluctuated increase between 2000 and 2004 which makes income around 80000£ and 90000£. Furthermore, The revenue dropped dramatically in the period of 2005 and 2008. Nevertheless, Lovely Loaves yearly earnings got hit by a slight decrease in 2009 and stayed steady until 2010.

The graph above This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 yearly revenue data for three bakeries in London from 2000 to 2010.

Overall
, over ten years, while the Bernie's Buns and Robbie's Bakery tend to have continued to increase, the Lovely Loaves numbers of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalaryreturnrevenueprofitpaygain
earnings
 have declined.

Firstly
, in the period between 2000 and 2002 Bernie’s Buns yearly You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalaryreturnrevenueprofitpaygain
earnings
 fluctuated sharply
 which began around The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£23000".£23000
23000£
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before
 rose substantially
 from 2006 until 2010. Regarding Robbie’s Bakery, Between 2000 and 2005 the annual You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalaryreturnrevenueprofitpaygain
earnings
 of Robbie’s Bakery remained stable by You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbring indrawderivesecuregetreceive
earning
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£49000".£49000
49000£
.

Moreover
, Robbie’s Bakery This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to increase significantly
 in 2006.

In contrast
, The annual income of Lovely Loaves This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 at around The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£90500".£90500
90500£
 in 2000 then followed by a fluctuated increase between 2000 and 2004 which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makes
 income around The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£80000".£80000
80000£
 and The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£90000".£90000
90000£
. Furthermore
, The revenue dropped dramatically
 in the period of 2005 and 2008. Nevertheless
, Lovely Loaves yearly You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsalaryreturnrevenueprofitpaygain
earnings
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 hit by a slight decrease in 2009 and stayed steady until 2010. 