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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. these nutrients may be unhealthy eaten too much

The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. these nutrients may be unhealthy eaten too much X82g
The pie chart illustrate the different nutrient food taken by the average American person in breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks. The amount of daily intake of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar may its causes effect on eating to much. The data is calibrated in percentage. Overall, In USA taking to much of sodium and saturated fat at dinner time and sugar in snacks period. Coming Breakfast taking very less all three (sodium, saturated fat, added sugar). Firstly, having sodium content in dinner is high with 43% and lunch 29% and both snacks & breakfast taking same low level 14%. Secondly, consuming saturated fat on USA 16% in breakfast and 26% in lunch and 21% in snacks and taking huge amount in dinner with 37%. Finally, adding sugar in food or others item coming to breakfast having less with 16% and 19% in lunch and 23% in dinner and huge amount of having in snacks with respectively. I
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,
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. The amount of daily intake of sodium,
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saturated
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fat
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less all three (sodium,
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is high with 43% and lunch 29% and both
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snacks
&
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breakfast
taking same low level 14%.
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16% in
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and 26% in lunch and 21% in
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snacks
and taking huge amount in
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dinner
with 37%.

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, adding sugar in food or others item coming to
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breakfast
having less with 16% and 19% in lunch and 23% in
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dinner
and huge amount of having in
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snacks
with
respectively
.

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IELTS academic The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. these nutrients may be unhealthy eaten too much

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