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The table shows the percentage of young people who were employed in different sectors in one country in 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of young people who were employed in different sectors in one country in 2005 and 2010. 3JeX
The given table illustrates the percentage of young employees in various employment sectors in a particular country in 2005 and 2010. It is clear that some sectors became more popular in 2010 and in some the percentage of employees reduced. Agriculture and transport sector were the least popular in both 2005 and 2010, with only 5% employed in each sector in 2005. However, in 2010, 8% were employed in agriculture, an increase of 3%, whereas only 4% got jobs in transport, a decrease of 1% from the figure of 2005. In manufacturing and in shops, restaurants and hotels, almost equal proportion of young people worked (21% and 20% respectively). But in 2010, the percentage fell to 14% in manufacturing, whereas it rose to 32% in shops, restaurants and hotels, making it the most sought after sector to work in 2010. Social services was the most popular area among the young people in 2005, and almost a third (34%) worked in this sector, but this percentage declined to 22% in 2010. In business and other sectors (not mentioned in the graph), almost equal number worked in both the given years, with 7-8% working in 2005 and 10% each working in 2010. Overall, it is clear that transport, manufacturing and social services employed lesser number of young people in 2010 as compared to 2005, whereas in all other departments, the employment of youth increased.
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young
employees in various employment
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sectors
in a particular country in 2005 and 2010. It is
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clear
that
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some
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sectors
became more popular in 2010 and in
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some
the
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percentage
of employees
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reduced
.

Agriculture and transport
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sector
were the least popular in both 2005 and 2010, with
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only
5% employed in each
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sector
in 2005.
However
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were employed
in agriculture, an increase of 3%, whereas
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4%
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got
jobs in transport, a decrease of 1% from the figure of 2005. In manufacturing and in shops, restaurants and hotels, almost equal proportion of
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young
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people
worked (21% and 20%
respectively
).
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But
in 2010, the
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percentage
fell to 14% in manufacturing, whereas it rose to 32% in shops, restaurants and hotels, making it the most sought after
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sector
to work in 2010. Social services was the most popular area among the
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young
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people
in 2005, and almost a third (34%) worked in this
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sector
,
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but
this
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percentage
declined to 22% in 2010. In business and other
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sectors
(not mentioned in the graph), almost equal number worked in both the
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given
years, with 7-8% working in 2005 and 10% each working in 2010.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that transport, manufacturing and social services employed lesser number of
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young
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people
in 2010 as compared to 2005, whereas in all other departments, the employment of youth increased.
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IELTS academic The table shows the percentage of young people who were employed in different sectors in one country in 2005 and 2010.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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