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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The graph and table illustrates the usage of water around the globe and consumption of water in two particular countries. Firstly, water used for domestic purpose was used as low as 10km^3 in 1900 which retain its position till 1920 and steadily grow up to 200km^3 till 2000. The industrial usage was also same as the domestic use in 1900 and gradually rise to 100km^3 in 1950, which surprisingly rose to 1100km^3 in the year 2000. Moreover, the agricultural indusrty consumed water around the globe was 500km^3, but it dramatically hike up to 300km^3 in 2000. Particularly, Brazil used approximately 176 million of water gallons in 26500km^2 and 359 m^3 area in 2000. While, Democratic Republic Of Congo used 5. 2 million gallons of water in 100km^2 and 8m^3 area, which is far less than brazil. Overall, most of the water consumed was in agrciultural sector and least was used in both domestic and industrial use. Brazil used most of the water in comparison with Congo in year 2000.
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around the globe and consumption of
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in two particular countries.

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,
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for domestic purpose was
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as low as
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10km
^3 in 1900 which retain its position till 1920 and
steadily
grow up to
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200km
^3 till 2000. The industrial usage was
also
same as the domestic
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use
in 1900 and
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rise to
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100km
^3 in 1950, which
surprisingly
rose to
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1100km
^3 in the year 2000.
Moreover
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indusrty
consumed
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around the globe was
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^3,
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it
dramatically
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300km
^3 in 2000.

Particularly
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approximately 176 million of
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gallons in
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^2 and 359 m^3 area in 2000.
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, Democratic Republic Of Congo
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5. 2 million gallons of
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in
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100km
^2 and
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8m
^3 area, which is far less than
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brazil
.

Overall
, most of the
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consumed was in
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agrciultural
sector and least was
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in both domestic and industrial
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. Brazil
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most of the
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with Congo in year 2000.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
169 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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