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The charts below show the percentages of water used in different sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007

The charts below show the percentages of water used in different sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007 eKB2G
The given graphs illustrate how much water used in various sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007 It can be seen from the graph that the water consumption in food industry, building industry and manufacturing decreased, whereas the percentage of water used in service industry and household both saw an increase. The proportion of water used in service industry experienced a roughly twofold surge from 13% to 21%, which was the second highest figure in 2007. Similarly, the water consumption in household accounted 19% in 1997 and growth by 2% in 2007. The figures for the remaining categories all decreased in various degrees. The food production industry was constantly dominant source of water consumption, whose percentage declined slightly from 48% to 41%. The water usage in building industry, which was always lowest, fell from 5% to 2%. Meanwhile, the percentage of water in manufacturing dropped from 15% to 11%.
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in various sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1997 and 2007

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from the graph that the
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consumption in food
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, building
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and manufacturing decreased, whereas the percentage of
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in service
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and household both
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an increase.

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in service
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experienced a roughly twofold surge from 13% to 21%, which was the second highest figure in 2007.
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, the
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consumption in household accounted 19% in 1997 and growth by 2% in 2007.

The figures for the remaining categories all decreased in various degrees. The food production
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was
constantly
dominant source of
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consumption, whose percentage declined
slightly
from 48% to 41%.
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The
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usage in building
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, which was always lowest, fell from 5% to 2%. Meanwhile, the percentage of
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in manufacturing dropped from 15% to 11%.
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