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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. GVbB
The chars demonstrates the ratio of water consumption for industrial, agricultural and domestic usage in North and South America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia and South east Asia. Overall, Enormous amount of water is use for agricultural purpose in most of areas, While least water usage for domestic cause. North america and Europe are the only two countries with highest consumption of water for industrial use (48% and 53% respectively). Water utilization for domestic motive is almost same in North America(13%) and Europe(15%). Similarly, North America use 39% water for agricultural purpose, while Europe utilize 32%. Water utilization Agricultural motive in South America, Africa, Central Asia and South east Asia is more than 70% in every areas. Water usage for domestic purpose is below 10% in Africa, Central and South east parts of Asia, where the numbers account for 19% in South America. The proportion of industrial water usage is below 12% in all these four areas likewise.
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east Asia
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for industrial
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utilization for
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39%
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utilization
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motive in South America, Africa, Central Asia and South
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east Asia
is more than 70% in every
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is below 12% in all these four areas
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IELTS academic The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

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