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the charts below show the percentage of volunteers by orgarizations in 2008 and 2014

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The pie chart given illustrates data about the proportion of volunteers split by organizations in two different years 2008 and 2014. Looking at the chart, it is immediately clear that the percentage of volunteers by organizations enviromental and sport increased, while those in three other witnessed a downward trend. Another main feature is that the number of people volunteering health care in 2014 registered the lowest figure of the chart. In 2008, there was a slight rose in the proportion of volunteers environment from 21% to 29%. A similar upward trend was seen in the number of people volunteering sport, starting from 15% in 2008, this rate experienced a rise to 25% over the period shown. In the first years examined, the total volunteers work for education decreased minimally by 7%, A similar tendency was seen in the quantity of people volunteering in these organzinations art, health care, and others, after 6 years, there was a 6 % decline in the figure for art organzinations. By contrast, health care witnessed the least prominent, attracting only 7% in 2008, after which this figure rose slightly by 1% in the next years.
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split by organizations in two
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years 2008 and 2014.

Looking at the chart, it is immediately
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that the percentage of
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volunteers
by organizations
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enviromental
and sport increased, while those in three other witnessed a downward trend. Another main feature is that the number of
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people
volunteering health care in 2014 registered the lowest figure of the chart.

In 2008, there was a slight rose in the proportion of
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volunteers
environment from 21% to 29%. A similar upward trend was
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seen
in the number of
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people
volunteering sport, starting from 15% in 2008, this rate experienced a rise to 25% over the period shown.

In the
first
years examined, the total
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volunteers
work for education decreased
minimally
by 7%, A similar tendency was
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seen
in the quantity of
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volunteering in these
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organzinations
art, health care,
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and others
, after 6 years, there was a 6 % decline in the figure for art
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organzinations
. By contrast, health care witnessed the least prominent, attracting
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only
7% in 2008, after which this figure rose
slightly
by 1% in the
next
years.
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