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The charts below show the percent chage in homebuyers in two countries and the types of homes sold in various years

The charts below show the percent chage in homebuyers in two countries and the types of homes sold in various years 6KN9W
The line graph shows the information about the change in the number of clients who buy houses in the USA and Canada from 2001 to 2011, in addition, the y-axis indicates the percentage of customers from 0 to 100% with the intervals of 10%; while the pie charts illustrate three different kinds of housing in the USA, including apartment, townhome and house in the year 2002, 2006 and 2010. At first glance, what stands out from the line graph is that there were violent fluctuations in the number of homebuyers in both given countries over a decade; furthermore, the three pie charts appear with significant variances in data for three types of houses. Looking at the details, in 2001, there were half of the customers buying houses in Canada. Although this figure experienced a downward trend by nearly a tenth in the first two years, it then peaked in 2005 and then saw a significant fluctuation in the number of homebuyers and stopped at just over 40% in 2011. In the first year of the given decade, just under a third of Americans purchased houses, which was nowhere near as Canadian, and then reached the highest point (90%) in 2008 before occurring a dramatic decrease to more than a fifth throughout the rest of time. Turning the pie charts, despite being the most dominant sections in 2002, house type became less popular over 8 years. By contrast, the percentage for apartments was just under one in three in 2002, 15% less than houses, slightly more well-known in 2006 and become the most popular in 2010 with 45%. Finally, townhouses didn’t see too much change per cent over three years with 20% on average.
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in the number of clients who
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in the USA and Canada from 2001 to 2011,
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kinds of housing in the USA, including apartment,
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house
in the
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2002, 2006 and 2010. At
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glance, what stands out from the line graph is that there were violent fluctuations in the number of homebuyers in both
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countries
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, the three pie charts appear with significant variances in data for three types of
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, in 2001, there were half of the customers buying
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in Canada. Although this figure experienced a downward trend by
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two years, it then peaked in 2005 and then
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a significant fluctuation in the number of homebuyers and
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40% in 2011. In the
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under a third of Americans
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, which was nowhere near as Canadian, and then reached the highest point (90%) in 2008
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occurring a dramatic decrease to more than a fifth throughout the rest of time. Turning the pie charts, despite being the most dominant sections in 2002,
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type became less popular
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8 years. By contrast, the percentage for apartments was
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under one in three in 2002, 15% less than
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,
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more well-known in 2006 and become the most popular in 2010 with 45%.
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too much
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per cent
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three years with 20% on average.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the percent chage in homebuyers in two countries and the types of homes sold in various years

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