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The charts below show the most popular films by genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.

The bar chart provide information about most demanded genres and divided for woman and men, while pie chart demonstrate data about ticket sales to different genres of movie. Overall, men choice action films and women romantic comedy. Difference between people’s preference not so huge, however action and romantic comedy films stand out from the trend. Moreover, most of all films is in action genre and least popular is thriller and other genres. It is clear from bar chart, average index of most popular genre is 32. 5% and next place take comedy movies with 20%. By this way, these 2 most demanded films are 75%. If average level of thriller is 12. 5%, than sci-fi take nearly 7. 5%. So these two genres not as popular as action or comedy films. Even in pie chart this trend is saving and thriller tickets are a tenth of all sold tickets. Totally, most demanded 3 genres are 85%.
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this trend is saving and thriller tickets are a tenth of all sold tickets.
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, most demanded 3 genres are 85%.
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