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The charts below show the frequency of being happy in the last four weeks by labour status and by age group.

The charts below show the frequency of being happy in the last four weeks by labour status and by age group. Bgdqw
The charts display the frequency of happiness in the last month which is recorded from labour statue and from age group. All in all, the diagram is devised into 2 charts which are pie chart and bar chart. The data in both charts are measured in percentages. We can see that the majority of people by age group were happy all/most of the time. 55. 1% of people in the age of 50-64 were happy all/most of the time and approximately 29. 4% of them were just happy some of the time. While, 15. 6% were being happy a little/none of the time. Similarly, Among those aged 65-74, 58. 3% of them were happy most of the time and 27. 4% were being happy some of the time. Another 14. 2% of them were not happy at all. On the other hand, the most significant proportion among the three labour group are people who were in education or training which is 72. 3% happy all the time. While, 58. 5% and 57% of people who were self employed and retired did so. The same data showed that people who were unhappy in the three groups were slightly decreased from 15. 2% in retired to 12. 4% in self employed and went straight to 6. 3% in education or training.
The
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display the frequency of happiness in the last month which
is recorded
from
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statue and from age group.

All in all, the diagram
is devised
into 2
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charts
which are pie
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chart
and bar
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. The data in both
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charts
are measured
in percentages.

We can
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see
that the majority of
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people
by age group were
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happy
all/most of the
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time
. 55. 1% of
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people
in the age of 50-64 were
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happy
all/most of the
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time
and approximately 29. 4% of them were
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just
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happy
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some of the
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time
. While, 15. 6% were being
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happy
a
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little
/none of the
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time
.
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, Among those aged 65-74, 58. 3% of them were
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happy
most of the
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time
and 27. 4% were being
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happy
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some of the
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. Another 14. 2% of them were not
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happy
at all.

On the other hand
, the most significant proportion among the three
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labour
group are
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who were in education or training which is 72. 3%
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happy
all the
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time
. While, 58. 5% and 57% of
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people
who were
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self employed
and retired did
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. The same data
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showed
that
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people
who were unhappy in the three groups were
slightly
decreased from 15. 2% in retired to 12. 4% in
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self employed
and went straight to 6. 3% in education or training.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the frequency of being happy in the last four weeks by labour status and by age group.

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