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The graphs below show the percentage of boys and girls in secondary school and higher education in different regions of the world in 2000.

The graphs below show the percentage of boys and girls in secondary school and higher education in different regions of the world in 2000. 9lmL0
The bar charts illustrates the proportion of males and females who studied in different regions of the world in the year 2000. Overall, it can be clear that the Europe was the highlighted among these nations in both secondary school and higher education in the given time period. According to the graph, the figures of secondary school for both females and males was 90% and 100% respectively. However, consedering the percentage of Asia, Latin America and South America was only below half of the Europe. In Asia there were nearly 50% of females and 10% low for males as 40. In the similar trend, females are more in both Latin America and South Africa as nearly 40% and males are below in this rate. Consedering the higher education, the high percentage of students preferred to study in Europe while the Asia and other two regions were very low in range of students studied there as below 20%.
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who studied in
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regions of the world in the year 2000.
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clear
that the Europe was the highlighted among these nations in both secondary school and higher education in the
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time period. According to the graph, the figures of secondary school for both
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females
and
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was 90% and 100%
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,
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consedering
the percentage of Asia, Latin America and South America was
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below half of the Europe. In Asia there were
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females
and 10% low for
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males
as 40. In the similar trend,
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females
are more in both Latin America and South Africa as
nearly
40% and
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males
are below in this rate.
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Consedering
the higher education, the high percentage of students preferred to study in Europe while the Asia and other two regions were
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low in range of students studied there as below 20%.
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